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| fadli_HULK | Date: Monday, 2011-10-24, 4:35 PM | Message # 1 |
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Comment Please
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GM-FHMuuTsuchi2 = 70%
GM-FHChiyo = 30%
GM-FHRikuRutoV2 = 20%
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Fairy Tail Screenpack = 20%
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| RetroMafioso | Date: Monday, 2011-10-24, 5:16 PM | Message # 2 |
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| Well, this is completely custom correct? Aside for maybe the feet. For now, I wouldn't worry about making stance animations. Probably just worry about make a solid, clean outline first. So lets get to that, try to use less black in the facial features- for example his nose and cheeks. Try not to double the black outlines, as much as possible- at least for now. He doens't have any ears. The left arm's positioning needs work. Overall I reccomend trying to redo the outlines- but taking more time. Try making the sprite without the scarf at first, then later once all looks well, add it. The shading has some decent points there. You seem to understand, to a fairly basic extent, the arts of using a light source.
It needs work, but the fact that it's more custom than edit is a definite plus! I'd reccomend trying to make a new sprite- a character not as big right now, so you can give a try at a smaller area, hpefully being able to work harder on less area than sloppy on large areas.
Overall, it's pretty good- but needs more work! ^-^
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| fadli_HULK | Date: Monday, 2011-10-24, 5:35 PM | Message # 3 |
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| You Are Great Spriter Teacher !!!!
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GM-FHMuuTsuchi2 = 70%
GM-FHChiyo = 30%
GM-FHRikuRutoV2 = 20%
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Fairy Tail Screenpack = 20%
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| RetroMafioso | Date: Monday, 2011-10-24, 5:44 PM | Message # 4 |
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| xD *blush* Thanks. I just hope it helps, and you continue to sprite.
Also another way to improve your abilities to sprite, is to be able to point out whats wrong with both your sprites, and other's. Check out the sprites already posted here and start commenting on them, seeing how they can improve or how you can improve based off their works.
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| HakuHuchiha | Date: Monday, 2011-10-24, 7:09 PM | Message # 5 |
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| Time to criticise!
First of all, proportions/shapes/perspective
The feet REALLY are way too small for the rest of his body, I do hope you realize that!
There's something really odd about the shape of the hands, but since feet and hands are most difficult to outline, my experience, it's comprehensible.
As you also, hopefully, noticed, the perspective is bad, because not every part of the body is in the same perspective (e.g. the arm in comparison with the whole body)
Outlines
Well, most of them ain't to bad, at least you didn't make double lines on parts, but the shapes, curves and fluidity could be improved a lot.
And the last part: shading
The shading really brings this sprite down
I take it you're pretty new to spriting? It's no problem you've got problems with shading, that's really normal. Just try to practise, practise and practise!
For a sprite of this size, I think you need at least 3 different gradients for each colour.
The shading is pretty dull, multiple light sources, yadda yadda yadda
This may seem like an awful lot of criticism in one time, but just try to understand everything I pointed out
And don't forget, this doesn't mean this is über bad or something, you just need more training 
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